Friday, April 30, 2010

11 Sec_Club_Aprl(WIP)

hey gyz.. here's the 11 sec club dialogue... jus need to do facial n lip sync... b4 that, how abt ur c n c's...;)




4 comments:

Unsound said...

hey jeevith nice attempt man but all the guestures are twinning... it gets a bit monotonous... love the poses but the animation is very pose to pose and ur missing some accents in the end...
and all the best with the 11sec club submission...

dapOOn said...

i agree! it's a really good attept, but it's still quite a few passes away from completion. i know it's a WIP and that's why it's all floaty. however one thing i didnt like is the envelope shake by the girl. it's a good acting choice but she shakes it way too much, almost on every syllable she spoke! jus reduce it. other than that, when the boss throws the ash on the envelope, it's not very clear, cuz it's not very visible to the audience (its placement is RIGHT behind the boss). make the envelope fall down a li'l to the left so that the audience can clearly see it and get a clearer picture of that act. either that, or make the boss come right.

well it's a good attempt, and i know there's literally no time to polish it anymore for the submission, but nevertheless since it's a good piece (with some really nice acting), i say keep working on it even after the deadline is gone. use it for ur reel.

good luck!! will vote for u! :)

damncreative said...

hey jeevith.. good goin man. well dapoon said it all. a few suggestions

1. avoid cliche acing dude. get out of it. get into the core character . Think of better acting choices..There is more to performance than just animation principles

2.i like the part wher he walks, nice use of space. i didnt like the scrath on his back. its unnecessary, it looks forced acting

3. if u notice the hand gestures of both the characters, its the same. No characteristics at all. U need contrast bro. See the old guy is very experienced in life and he s trying to convenience her . Think about your grand pa. How will he reach to such situations. Even when the other character goes all crazy he will keep his temper down . Old age has a lot of patience .. try getting that

4. the girls acting is too repetitive. break it and get more anger on her

its coming out gr8. good setup..u can make this a good acting piece . nice work man

jEEvith said...

hey thank u all gyzz....

i really wanna work more on it... unfortunately m running outta time. N also i ve been working on this for more than 3 weeks.. goin mad on one side n havin fun wid these 2 chars on the other..

Neways, i'l keep these basic things in mind, n implement it on my next works..:)

thank u once again..:)