Friday, September 26, 2008

Thought - Dialog1-WIP

Bonjour Mons,

Haven't been able to vist the forum for quite sometime, was working on my reel.
As before I need all you comments and critics on this dialog.

Note: I have just blocked the Jaw and I still need to work on the expressions.

updated version below:


9 comments:

kasana said...

Good work Deepak....liked it. not for jury but if you want to work later on.
When he stepping & bending forward ..its hitting in eyes. Let see how you'll do lipsync.

And I'm really amazed...hoe you hair are going n coming in reference video. I always knew you've supernatural power... :)

Rodentthought said...

o*k u Kasana :)
Sure and Thanks a lot for helping me through...

Prasad said...

Man this is looking great ! ...i don't know if it just me, but frankly at certain places i am not able to relate the acting to dialog ... just for instance in the end when he says '...creative alternatives' ...why he is looking around as if he is confused or probably afraid of something ...may be i am not getting it clearly ...animation, no doubt is cool ...liked it ...cool one!

Prasad said...

...and as said by kasana ...what's with the hair ? ...this proves that you are doing some hardwork on this piece ...wonderful ! ...lage raho :)

Harish k said...

Hi deepak, cool stuff i like it..few thing that i would have changed is...

*in the beginning when he say my mind is..so on...the acting is not clear..i feel as if some one else is delivering the dialog..and he forgot to react..hehe... May be in the beginning when that sentences comes..U can have his hand on his head...the rest acting is good i like it...

* one more thing very important is blinks...the timing and spacing is very important...we normally blink when we change a thought r change directions...give it a 2 to 4 frame spacing..it will look good
2fr to blink and open back 4 fr..

* i feel u should work on the eyes..eye should lead in some places in the animation..right now i get a feeling like he is not sure what he is suppose to do....if u see anime..they will say the entire story in just the way the eye moves looks.. and ur eye brows its one of best tools to give facial expressions..

Thats it..hehe ^_^
but really good stuff i like it :)
cheers _ Harish.k ^_^

Rodentthought said...

Prasad said...

"at certain places i am not able to relate the acting to dialog ... just for instance in the end when he says '...creative alternatives' ...why he is looking around as if he is confused or probably afraid of something ..."

1. Good spot on this Prasad :), I want him to look confused in the end. The basic intention of this whole dialog was to bring the psycho character out. But, in the latest version that am working on I have given a slight delay, so that the confused action happen after he says "alternatives". Please let me know if you disagree?
will post the latest version soon.

2. As far as the video reference is concerned, its just a reference and I have changed a lot on the acting later. Yet the base is from the clip that i have shown.

Harish k said...

"*in the beginning when he say my mind is..so on...the acting is not clear.."

1. You are right and am aware of this I need to change that part before the Jury. Thankyou

"* one more thing very important is blinks...the timing and spacing is very important..."

1. Thanks for mentioning it Harish I will keep this in mind when I animating the eyes. Haven't animated the eyes yet:)

"* i feel u should work on the eyes..eye should lead in some places in the animation.."

1. Sure dude will keep this in mind.

damncreative said...

hey budyy we spoke about this. Work on those areas. It will come out good.

cheers;)

dapOOn said...

hey buddy one of the BEST lipsyncs i've seen in takshaa!! nice acting! however, to be honest, i personally feel making it a li'l snappy with very strong "photo-finish" poses wud make this much much better! but if u wanna go ahead with this, i might suggest that in the beginning, when he says "my mind is a RAGING torrent" and so on, how abt making him turn when he says "RAGING". cuz he stresses on that word, so making him do something equally dramatic right then, makes it insync. just like the way u made him pull his hand over his head as he said "RIVULETS of thoughts". i also liked the way u made him adjust his specs as he's speaking. and does he have to keep looking at the bulb for so long? just my thoughts but i kinda found it unnecessary. why cant he look at the board too at times? after all they are HIS formulae!! lol

and yea, u wanted to make him look confused in the end? i wish u cud make that gear change much much clearer. like, make both his arms go down totally or sumtin. cuz rite now it seems very confusing to the audience. i suggest u time it well.

but then buddy this is ONE HERCULEAN task! congrats for pulling it off! i gotta search for MY creative alternatives now!!! lolz keep up the inspiring work senior!

Prasad said...

aah ! now it's clear about his confusing look at the end :) ...awesome yarr ...loved it !